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click1
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since 2003-03-25
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0 posted 2004-03-11 11:54 PM


Take my heart.
Take my faith.

Take my hope.
Take my life.

Take my plight.
Take my point of view.

Take my lust.
Take my dreams.

     Take my words?


              and give nothing?

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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2004-03-12 04:59 PM


no!
I hate people who TRY to take everything from you.
Its horrible.
the poem is straight to the point.
I liked.

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
2 posted 2004-03-12 05:10 PM


I dunno. This is a little too straight forward but i dunno. I liked it, but you should put more imagery into it. Very nice.

~VAmpire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
3 posted 2004-03-12 06:11 PM


I kind of agree with kissa-rachelle.
And Lexy, i hate people who take everything away from you.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2004-03-13 04:02 AM


but save everything...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

click1
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since 2003-03-25
Posts 152
usa
5 posted 2004-03-13 06:04 PM


" I never did give anyone hell, I just told them the truth and they thought it was hell"

          Harry S Truman

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