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Dark Poetry #4

Scratches on Your Back and Marks on Your Neck

Defective
Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 73
Salisbury NC

0 posted 2004-03-06 05:31 PM

I was never really able to understand
the complexities of this "relationship"
until now
as you lay there snoring beside me
bent over in your pseudo-fetal position
and I realize I don't even trust you
as you pretend to sleep.
But I'll go on my intuition
and let you be
I'll speak my peace
while you can't hear me.
Tonight I'll say what needs to be said
but it'll all be forgotten in the morning.

"I prayed for the very last time
tonight, before we laid here in the usual silence
after our occasional bouts of bad sex
for this to be over soon,
for one of us to finally said it aloud
but I'm scared that you'll agree
and I'm afraid to be alone.
Baby, I can't breathe tonight
please save me.
Or you could just lay there...
and let me fight this battle
by myself, like I always seem to do
but you always take the credit
when the war is won and over.
I'm sorry if I seem just a little tense
but I doubt if you'd recognize my face right now
when the mascara stains are all washed away
it's hard to see the other side of the cosmetic
rainbow
and I promise there's a pot of gold
somewhere else in this life
but it's no longer here.
Maybe when you wake up and stare as I sleep
you'll feel the same way
but please do as I did
and not say a word to my waking
I've come to this realization
but I'll never tell you to your face
because I'm just...
Don't leave me alone."

This will probably not make sense to anyone else... but I liked some of the lines, so here it is.

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

1 posted 2004-03-13 12:03 PM

It makes sense to me. In face, I really like it. I don't really know if I can explain why... Maybe because you captured the moment and the mind so perfectly.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

2 posted 2004-03-14 06:02 PM

I like it..the emotions roll on the words like waves on the ocean! eb and flow like the tide.
Well done! I can see....

Thanx!

Click

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-03-15 11:46 AM

I think its good. Everything that runs through your head is placed to explain exactly what your talking about. It looks like a broken mirror and sounds like a daytime soap. Would make a nice song too.

GIS

[I appreciate your concern, you'll always stink and burn.]-Kurt Cobain

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