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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-03-03 10:55 PM

Plagued with the feeling of a devil,
Strumming the strings of my pulsing heart,
Wonder if tomorrow finds me here,
In the same place.

Unmoving,
It’s unnerving,
What will I do?
When the morning rises,
And the sun decays,
Until the dark possesses,
The sky once more.

Your musty scent,
Lets on a secret,
I want to unveil,
You’re flustered,
The question I asked rings in the air.

The dusty air,
Infects my mind,
I scream into the sheet of black,
Worrying above my weary head,
I’m falling again,
Into your body.

You accept me,
You’re proud,
You’re ego boosts,
You don’t realize how this hurts.

How it burns,
I’m here again,
The dawn rises,
Soon it sets,
I’m here again.

I can’t move,
Till I know,
What your secret is,
Then you tell me and I pull back,
You walk away,
I watch the places where your footsteps seem indented,
Into the earth,

Always and forever,
Suddenly doesn’t seem so long.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2004-03-04 12:16 PM

hey courts, this is amazing.

i dont know wether u realise how amazing this peice is.

its unbelievable, like something a professional wod write. i cant beleve how bloody great this is.

the imagery, the rhythm, the rhyming, EVERYTHING about it worked, u asked me tday which was my fav of urs, this def has the number 1 spot.

wow

keep rockin

darkness

no one gives a s**t, as long as you smile.

"And I swear that i dont have a gun"- Kurt Cobain

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-03-06 03:45 AM

Thanks Sophie, i love this piece. And i'm glad you do too!

However long the night, the dawn will break.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-03-08 12:43 PM

"The dusty air,
Infects my mind,
I scream into the sheet of black,
Worrying above my weary head,
I’m falling again,
Into your body."

This part was incredible!!

Amazin. I like this a lot. The Imagery was awesome.

~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2004-03-09 01:05 AM

greatness miss

GROWL

oh but sophie, after this piece, courts IS a professional. I agree with soph 110%

U GO CHICA

ENJOY RANGI

Call no man happy till he is dead.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

5 posted 2004-03-10 09:59 PM

Rachelle - Hey thanks so much i'm happy you liked this poem

Lor - Love....you little charmer

Hollow

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

6 posted 2004-03-11 11:58 PM

Nice job, I saw It!
Better,
I felt it...

Click

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