navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #4 » I
Dark Poetry #4
Post A Reply Post New Topic I Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Copperbell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956


0 posted 2004-03-03 11:40 AM



A question creeps through my soul
It swells, filling the empty spaces of my spirit
Like waves it hits me, the impact sends me reeling
Falling, and again I have hit the ground

I see a smirk, and it is not mine
But it is saved for me, a snicker that is all mine
To bear
to steal another piece of my heart
   to steal another piece of who I am

There are words
  Tragic words
    I can cry, and it feels good to be so sorry, so sad, even if I can't put my finger on why
    
    I have been eaten, one bite at a time, by something I have finally put my finger on

    A Lie

I turn one way and people lie, I turn another way and...

even my own mind tells me lies

© Copyright 2004 Copperbell - All Rights Reserved
River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
1 posted 2004-03-04 04:21 PM


I can't agree more with this one at all...are you like a mind reader or something? maybe this is just more commin than what i thought. nicely said. *claps and adds to library*

      - River

sleep my precious slumber

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-03-04 10:22 PM


I like it. Nice Write .

However long the night, the dawn will break.

Copperbell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956

3 posted 2004-03-06 09:24 PM


Thank you, River, in my experience, it is a common experience.
Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion
4 posted 2005-01-28 12:12 PM


very nice write

does your fire burn? can you hear me? ILL JUST KNOCK THIS WALL RIGHT DOWN

Copperbell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956

5 posted 2005-01-28 08:14 PM


Thank you Snowflake
tecoyah
Member
since 2003-11-16
Posts 83
NY
6 posted 2005-02-12 09:43 AM


You have captured an emotional response to life, and placed it into the realm of understanding. Hard enough.
But, you have also managed to do so in a beatiful flow, which is much more of a rarity.

Splendid writting.....Thank you

Copperbell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956

7 posted 2005-02-12 11:54 AM


Appreciate your response Tecoyah - thank you.
green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
8 posted 2005-02-12 11:05 PM


I just wonder how people like you and I have such high numbers for posts...  
When you hear it so much it becomes you.  Slight ouch.

-GIS

Copperbell
Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956

9 posted 2005-02-13 01:23 AM


This was one of the best things I ever learned - not everything said about me or even what I thought about me was true.  Awesome news!!
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
10 posted 2005-02-13 11:53 AM


Yes, a very common experience..loved the way you expressed it.

M

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
11 posted 2005-03-09 04:26 AM


Wow...

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #4 » I

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary