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Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
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some where deep in the shadows

0 posted 2004-03-02 07:40 PM



Trepidation upon first sight
Serene beauty is yours to hold
Wisps of hair gently flutter
From a masque of falsified perfection
Dreams of social inequality and snide remarks
Clawing to the top,
Upon the backs of friends
Who are entirely strangers
Darkened hair holds only spiders
Curling thin lips hold only a cruel sneer
Evil spirits soar above,
Appearing as halos and angels
Tear all others down Madame of flawlessness
Maybe then happiness will truly be yours…
Your eyes open wide
Never having been told how shamefully,
You fake at life
Sounds of shattered glass and senseless screaming
Waves of torment and shallow pretenses wash over
Shorn hair and slit wrists
A truly dark day
I smile on my merry way…


critiques please...its been a while

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

© Copyright 2004 Lance Keber - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2004-03-02 07:53 PM


I must return for the critique...
but...I like the end quite a bit.

till then...Lex

Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows
2 posted 2004-03-02 10:13 PM


thank ya...and thank you for the critique that is upcoming

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

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