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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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Deep thick blackness Caresses your porcelain skin Your eyes rip at my body And my wrists writhe with the pain of your ties I don't belive you'll hurt me But your eyes so promising tell me otherwise i don't see you acting on your anger but your etching hands tell me something else Sweet Dark Seduction flat on my blood red lips letting go for one moment I feel you estimate my weakness I don't believe you'd do this But your lips tell mine who's in charge I don't see you leaving me here But the clothes on my back tell me i have an excuse Lost Dark Soul Lingering in my mind Your lips still toying with mine I don't know what to believe I don't believe you'll stop But your pace tells me sooner or later I don't see you lying to me But your eyes tell me theres something hiding behind them Your Naked Thoughts Breathe Through Your Eyes Allowing Me To See Right Through Into Your Deep Murderous Soul... Call no man happy till he is dead. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
 i love it (like the porcelain bit)It describes alot in one short sentance, sort of like Skyfire's poem...... Courts, However long the night, the dawn will break. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
finished now LOR Call no man happy till he is dead. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
you almost amde me cry agen girl. i hate you for it. I don't belive you'll hurt me But your eyes so promising tell me otherwise i don't see you acting on your anger but your etching hands tell me something else genius and pure art. grrr im so jealous of u! You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
"Your Naked Thoughts Breathe Through Your Eyes Allowing Me To See Right Through Into Your Deep Murderous Soul..." powerful "So what befalls the flawless? |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow...i agree with eor, that last line is powerfull. great job! "Your lips still toying with mine" lol, i love that part too, it took me a moment to figure out what that means, lol. again...great groovy gravy job =) - River sleep my precious slumber |
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