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Forgotten Rhyme
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
**this is called "forgotten rhyme" because i found it stashed away and i seriusly don't remember writing it, lol, i don't even know if it was one poem or two.** Feel like I'm dying heart racing blood puring like rain down my beaten brow I need you so much more than this breaking aching life will you reach out your hand and rescue me pour out your grace and set me free help me become more than just a simple life on a quiet street rushing off with tired feet make me somehow soar higher than just really far but just enough to reach you and the kirei amai voices it's really only you I...seek Maybe you where strong and you where there to lift me up maybe i was weak but you where there in my silent hallow sleep I don't really know all the answers I can't really say that you will live another day but I know that you will never be alone as long as you stay true and strong with your faith never falter never stray please I ask set your sights on things above don't look away please just try and live today rest upon existence. seek life, and forever never die. [This message has been edited by River (02-12-2004 02:33 AM).] |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow! this is really really good! i love your style river and this one is totally covered in it! youve got great rhythm and ryhme going on in this one. well written! how you copuld forget about such a masterpiece I dont know! I thonk it fits like this, as one poem. Its almost got an intermission act happening! hehehe just wat i think though! good job! kepp rockin  darknessYou can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
aww, thanx darkness, that's very sweet of you =). honestly i can't figure out how i forgot about it either, lol, maybe i'm coming down with slight amnesia...oh well, anywho, later chick. - River rest upon existence. seek life, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah, this is pretty good |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I have a slight feeling that I have a lesson to learn from this. To say the least. And yeah intermission definitly sounds likely. -GIS Why live for gold when you can be happy? |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
thanx passing shadows...and, Craig? i don't think this was aimed at you in particuler, lol, but hey, i really don't remember much about it, and looking back to it, it doesn't make much sense to me...but if you learn something from it than that is awesome. in the meantime i will try to write stuff that makes a little more sense...and actually remember writing it, lol. later - River sleep my precious slumber |
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