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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-02-07 07:05 PM


She stood beside her grave last night,
Not a tear speckle in her amber eye,
The weary of the pain she felt,
Long reflected in the sky,
She stood beside her grave last night,
A smile on her cracking face,
Her contorted hands writhe limited,
Through the sleeves of faded lace,
She stood beside her grave last night,
And turned to follow her shadow,
She skipped past the stones of death,
And entered through the meadow,
She stood beside her grave last night,
Her memory long gone,
Of childish games and porcelain dolls,
The error in the song,
She stood beside her grave last night,
Not a tear speckle in her amber eye,
Her transparent mirage is bound there,
Through the impact of the sky.


She stood beside her grave last night,
Her hands clasped around her dress,
She closed her tired amber eyes,
And wished her soul could rest.


© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
1 posted 2004-02-08 03:02 AM


I really like this one!
again the repition worked well for you!
I love this line: Not a tear speckle in her amber eye,

and then at the end the line:She closed her tired amber eyes,

The twist confused me a bit, I think I got it in the end though.

Keep rockin

darkness

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

Vagabond
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since 2004-01-23
Posts 163

2 posted 2004-02-08 08:14 AM


I reallt like this one to it took a little while to understand though

Vagabon the Lost One

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
3 posted 2004-02-09 10:40 PM


hey courtz!!!!
I LOVED THIS ONE
I LOVED THIS PART
She stood beside her grave last night,
Her hands clasped around her dress,
She closed her tired amber eyes,
And wished her soul could rest

lol i dont think soph know's its u lol

LOL TXT ME K?
LUV LOR

Silhouetted by Deception

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-02-10 01:07 AM


Hehe, i dnt think Sophie knows its me either, but thats the way i like it...............................
Luv
Hollow

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