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Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 114


0 posted 2004-02-03 06:07 PM



I am that violent distraction
that tearing sound in the silence
gnawing away at your sanity

I am that lightless void
that place where you hide
all your nasty mistakes

I am those bloody means
those damned hands that killed
when you were too weak

I am that which you despise
that which you utterly need
I am that which you can't accept

I am all of these
and I am you.


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darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
1 posted 2004-02-04 12:27 PM


I know all too well who "you" are

this was an amazing poem...... loved it

darkness

btw i hear a tearing sound in the night,,,, it gnaws at my sanity too

(no lies)

Please answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11

nn
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since 2000-09-18
Posts 75

2 posted 2004-02-04 10:46 AM


I am all that too .And you are more than just that.  
Great poem, full of feeling.I liked it very much.

Jelfling
Junior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 21
Indiana
3 posted 2004-02-04 11:23 AM


It makes me think of people with multiple personalities, how when a person can't deal with a situation or an issue, they create a personality that can. Was it meant to be interpreted that way?
eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2004-02-05 12:41 PM


i am all of you and everyone else...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Kie
Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77
USA
5 posted 2004-02-05 04:51 PM


Loved the ending!! This poem was fantastic to read. Kie
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