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MGROVES
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0 posted 2004-02-01 11:07 PM



LIFE PUT ON HOLD,
THINGS WILL GET BETTER, I"M TOLD.
EMOTIONS, PUT AWAY ON A SHELF,
SO HOW DO I GET ON WITH MYSELF?
WHERE DO YOU HIDE?
FROM WHAT IS DEEP INSIDE.
MOST SAY IT"S "EVIL" THAT LURKS IN ME,
MY SOUL SAYS IT'S LIFE REVERSE THE LETTERS YOU'LL SEE.
SOME SEE IT ONE WAY,SOME SEE IT ANTHER,
YOU'VE SAID THOSE WORDS ONCE BEFORE,MY BROTHER.
LIFE CAN BE A SCARY THING,
WORDS NEVER HEARD, UNTILL YOU SING.
EVIL LURKS DEEP INSIDE,
WHERE SOULS EVEN WANT TO HIDE.
LOVE AND CHASE 'EVIL; AWAY,
THEN THE SOUL CAN 'LIVE' ANOTHER WAY.
ONCE YOU PUT LOVE IN YOUR HEART,
THE SOUL RETURNS, LIFE CAN START.


© Copyright 2004 marsha groves~adragonsdream~ - All Rights Reserved
Jelfling
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1 posted 2004-02-02 11:41 AM


I like it, but it's distracting when it's all in caps
MGROVES
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2 posted 2004-09-07 06:40 PM


sorry about caps was using old key board at time and cap was stuck


kissa~rachelle
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3 posted 2004-09-07 09:04 PM


I like this, the message was awesome, and i just really loved it.

The caps did take away, but it was something you couldnt help so thats okay.

The ending was my fav.

I'm saving.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

brezee
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4 posted 2004-09-07 09:36 PM


I like this, good point on a few of the many ways to look at life...great job!
"LOVE AND CHASE 'EVIL; AWAY,
THEN THE SOUL CAN 'LIVE' ANOTHER WAY."... I like how you emphasized on the 'live' and 'evil' in each line...


~*brezee*~

Hollow_Emptiness
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5 posted 2004-09-08 02:33 AM


Caps were refreshing, distracting yes, but refreshing. Poem was. Can't describe it...I just liked it.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

Susan
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6 posted 2004-09-08 07:49 PM


I like the concept.  Interesting.  And yes, evil may be overcome, even that which resides within each heart of man.  Merely a matter of discipline and self modification.- ah, isn't that easier said than done.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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