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silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-01-31 11:44 PM


I see eyes of fathomless grey, bigger and darker than time

I see lips of bleeding pain, relentlessly throbbing from the absense of your sweet seduction

I see aging hands, strangley misused and overdeveloped

I see ominous lies, seething through the unveiled mask left on the greiving face

I see a broken chest, no more lifting in the light of your burning presence  

I see a reflection, in this pool of black, unforgiving water

I see a million options to turn back, give in to your ludicrous reason

But I see the reflection of my fathomless eyes, my throbbing lips, my misused hands, my ominous lies, and my broken chest, falling.

Falling deep into this River of Hate


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darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
1 posted 2004-02-01 01:05 AM


hey

oi i dunno this one just like totally reminds me of one u posted ages ago on serenities

u used the aged hands and the ending was the same cept for da river of hate...
im i right?

darkness

Please answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-02-02 02:45 AM


mate, it was the same one exactly
just used it on this account cuz i couldnt be bothered re writing one
lool

lool luv yas
LOR

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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA
3 posted 2004-02-06 11:07 AM


Well-delivered twist. Too often, it is painfully obvious when someone is going to draw a metaphor to themselves, but I never saw this one coming.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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