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At the edge and a doorway,TX

0 posted 2004-01-30 06:37 AM


This was a piece that I wrote one fine 6am. And there is music that is suppose to be played lightly in the background as this is a dance monologue type of thing. It is going to be performed on stage one day since it goes with a play that I wrote with a friend of mine. I hope you like it.
The blood rolled into the valleys and into the streams
Covering everyone and everything
It washed over me like a desire for love or sex
The pretty in me was pulled and I layed there almost empty
Reaching deeper and deeper
Dirty
I bathed in it
Splashed around
Drinking it in
I felt it slide down my cheeks and over my chest
Oozing and spilling
It trailed its way over my stomach
Keeping in time with the rhythm of the drums
Pounding
Louder and louder
My hands ran it across my new body
Being filled
Wiggling my toes to see if it was real
I cradled myself
Kneeling down and backwards
I dipped my hair in the warm, red liquid
Flinging it forward and watching the bloody arch in the air
Letting out a howl as the moon raises
The hair slaps against my chest heavily
I am MAN
I am WOMAN
I am WAR
I am LOVE
I am DEATH
I am REBORN
I am RENEWED
I am ALIVE!!!

Love,
Ladycat

© Copyright 2004 Vynette M. Charles-Brooks - All Rights Reserved
NightFall
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The land known as England
1 posted 2004-02-02 01:35 PM


This is excellant and i hope you get what you want from it
good luck.

Vagabond
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2 posted 2004-02-02 03:33 PM


I like it to, it's realy true to the dark side

Vagabon the Lost One

River
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since 2003-09-16
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my own little world
3 posted 2004-02-06 03:53 PM


*cocks eyebrows slightly* ...wow gurlie, you really know the definition of dark poetry don't you? i bet this is in the dictionary as an example, lol. good stuff chick hope things work out for ya.

    - River

rest upon existence. seek life,  
and forever never die.

eor
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blues & greys
4 posted 2004-02-07 02:33 AM


"Dirty
I bathed in it
Splashed around
Drinking it in"

loved this part, this is a really powerful poem

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Lexy
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California
5 posted 2004-02-12 06:47 PM


good! really good!
I found morbid images arising in my mind. Very visual. I find it sort of ironic, that this person is enjoying bathing in the same substance that is flowing inside them. Incompassed completely in the liquid of life.
I quite enjoyed this piece. and I could see it being performed. Good luck with that. Your good.
~Lex

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