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Dark Poetry #4

Bleed Me Dry

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-01-27 04:18 PM

i'm done
waiting for you
every second
of every hour
of every day
i'm tired
i just want this to go away
your words pierce my heart
like cupids arrow
bleed me dry
but it wont make any difference
i don't want this anymore
i don't want you anymore..

Jelfling
Junior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 21
Indiana

1 posted 2004-01-27 11:36 PM

I really liked this poem, but it might have been better if you had gone into more detail about why you were done with them.

serenities_blood
Member

since 2003-12-21

Posts 56
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-01-27 11:51 PM

i dnt think u need to add y
its fine with out it
it allows you to make ur own meaning for the reason your done. it shows great skills as it brings the reader into the poem
great work

xoxLORxox

Who says a woman cannot serve?
It would be my pleasure

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

3 posted 2004-01-28 11:54 PM

I love the mystery of the poem

it doesnt need to say why I think.

I felt a lot of pain coming through this poem

I liked it alot

hardcore

darkness

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