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green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-01-27 10:55 AM



I'm on this long string tied tight and pretty at the end
The hooks and razorblades that keep me dangling off the ground below
I hold my self up and look at the nothing below and reallize this is my life
I've got to climb out and do something worth breathing for
Get out of this prison, this void of nothing in my life
Sometimes it feels like if I were dead maybe the action of rot my corpse would go through would be more exciting and more worth living in.

The blood of a lamb is innocent and pure
The same purity I no longer have
Once this filth never pure again
Trust and faith of me the dirty lamb
Innocent in stupidity and critical of it too

This string is so faithful and holds me here still
A gentle breeze could throw me of my grasp to fuse with the nothing I've become
Forever falling into a life I already live
No chance of escape
Just falling with faith forever

Hatered and lies go hand-in-hand, while love is always truth.

[I do it for the love...  ...I do it from the bottom of my heart.]-Smile Empty Soul

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
Vagabond
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since 2004-01-23
Posts 163

1 posted 2004-01-27 11:56 AM


and my poem got deleted! humph Bloody Favoritism!

Vagabon the Lost One

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2004-01-27 05:59 PM


^no favoritism goes on at this site, if your poem got deleted it was for a good reason...anyways greeny, i enjoyed this, havent heard from you in a while, but i guess you havent heard from me either, but anyways, nice wirte...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
3 posted 2004-01-28 01:30 AM


"The blood of a lamb is innocent and pure
The same purity I no longer have
Once this filth never pure again"

  just wondering, are you speaking in regards of past actions? or just memories of stuff? because he does wipe your slate clean once you surrender...but then you should know that already, maybe i just interpereted wrong. (i do that sometimes)

   anyway, i liked this Craig...isn't this like your first poem since you got saved? it's kool. later dude!!! *hugs*

      - Bonnie Sue =)

rest upon existence. seek life,  
and forever never die.

Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
4 posted 2004-01-28 01:36 AM


very dark, the struggle is hard...keep writing.  I liked it.
darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-01-28 11:49 PM


APPLAUSE

ALOT OF APPLAUSE!!!!

I agree totally with hatter!

wow that blew me away! so dark and painfull

rock on

Please answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2004-01-29 01:29 PM


Thanx guys.  yeah maybe I should be writing a bit happier since I'm saved now, but saved or not my life still kinda sux.  Rock on does sound good right about now.  I'll post more.

-GIS

Hatered and lies go hand-in-hand, while love is always truth.

[I do it for the love...  ...I do it from the bottom of my heart.]-Smile Empty Soul

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