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serenities_blood
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-01-26 02:42 AM



Your thick blood drips down my chest
You lay your head down to rest
I am watching violently
As the whole world falls in on me
Beneath your greedy watchful eye
nothings veiled, for i can't lie
But tonight is one for exceptions
I'm silhouetted by deception
Your naked body cold but strong
You feel me hesitate and know somethings wrong
Though your eyes, too blind to see
you feel your drifting away from me
Even though i love you more
than anyone i've loved before
Your body doesnt fit with mine
Your heart doesnt beat in time
Your blood still drips down my chest
With our love we'll put to rest




xoxLORxox

Who says a woman cannot serve?
It would be my pleasure

© Copyright 2004 Gina G. - All Rights Reserved
Gothika_07
Member
since 2004-01-15
Posts 61
new zealand
1 posted 2004-01-26 02:50 AM


OMG OMG OMG
I SERIOUSLY AM IN LOVE WIV THAT POEM IT WAS ALMOST ROMANTIC AND OOOHHHH SO TRAGIC!!!!
A GOOD SAD LOVE POEM EXACTLEY WOT EVERY ONE NEED!!!
REMINDS ME SUM WHAT OF ROMEO AND JUILET!!

LUV YAZ CYAZ 2MORO
BEX

sgreybe
Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
2 posted 2004-01-26 08:06 AM


Dear Serenities-blood

A great piece of poetic art.  Your words captured a really tragic feeling.  They tear at your soul.

I really enjoyed this.

Thanks for sharing

Sylvia

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
3 posted 2004-01-27 12:51 PM


my amazingly talented bestest frend

how you can express such tragedy heartbreak and roimance thru words bewilders me


ok screw the big words

THAT WAS HARDCORE I LOVE IT!!!

U ALWAYS WRITE SUCH AMAZING POEMS THAT TOTALLY SHOCK ME

man that was sooo mint

keep posting in dark... u rock at it

wen i read that it just screams at me LORE (hehe visuals)

but man it toally blew me away

love it

keep rocking hardcore dudette

catch u on the flipside


rophie


(profanity edited out by Moderator)

[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (01-27-2004 02:34 AM).]

serenities_blood
Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-01-27 11:55 PM


woah that was the longest post ever!
looool thanx anywayz
ANYHOO
WAT THE HEY
soz had a moment there

LUV

xoxLORxox

Who says a woman cannot serve?
It would be my pleasure

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