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Dark Poetry #4

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Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

0 posted 2004-01-20 04:59 PM

Jump into my skin
And go for a swim.

Crawl into my veins
And feel all the pains
That you’ve caused me.

Float around in my head
And listen to words you’ve said.
And try not to be scared.

I’ve lived with that fear.
You can visit here.

You owe me that much
And so much more.

Bury yourself into my heart
And see if you can keep it beating
Because it’s becoming too hard for me.

You drenched me in my own blood.
And you’ve drowned me under my own thoughts.
You have all my strength, so
Use it to visit me.

Visit and discover everything you left behind
The other times you dropped by.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2004-01-21 12:03 PM

s$*^t

that is brutal dammit

f&$K that has shocked me and chilled me to the bone

i totally can relate to that

man that is seriously hardcore "stuff"

i love it

i honestly dont know what to say, i cant explain how much that has tou8ched me and how much i understand it

amazing amazing amazing

can i plz put it in a folder i have of all the best poems ive read
i would really like to, but if you dont wnat to im sweet with that

it is seriously one of best poems i have honestly ever read

hardcore

darkness

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

2 posted 2004-01-22 09:01 AM

Wow - darkness - thank you. I'm really glad the poem could touch you so deeply. Well, as glad as I can be considering the matter of the poem. ;-) Anyway.. you're welcome to put it in a folder and keep it. It's amazing when someone appreciates you're words that much.

Justin Deen
New Member

since 2004-01-22

Posts 7
London, UK

3 posted 2004-01-22 09:58 AM

Loved the way you explaind you're feelings, great writing!

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