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Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
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I live within myself

0 posted 2004-01-19 04:06 PM


Let’s not fight today.
I’m tired.
Let’s schedule it for tomorrow.
Because my throat is raw
And my hands are still recovering
From last time
That I wrapped them around your neck.

Let’s not yell today.
The kids are sleeping
And I’m sick of waking them up.
We can yell tomorrow
Because it’s Friday
And they won’t have school the next day
And then we won’t have to dread a teacher’s call.

Let’s be nice today.
I’m too lazy not to be.
I don’t really want to raise my voice to you.
I do sometimes miss your smile.
So maybe we can talk softly today
And you can sit by my side
And we can act happy, or at least try.

I don’t have the energy to be sad.
I really feel a lack of emotion.
Anger has drained it all away
And I’ll have to take the time
To restock and recharge
Until tomorrow.
That can be our battle day.

What do you say?


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1 posted 2004-01-19 05:51 PM


then i say "if tomorrow never comes....."!

i know ever word of this one, i know exactly where you are coming from.....

great way to express yourself

River
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since 2003-09-16
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2 posted 2004-01-20 03:46 PM


i know how you feel =( hope things work out...by the way, nice write.

    - River

rest upon existence. seek life,  
and forever never die.

Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
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I live within myself
3 posted 2004-01-20 03:59 PM


These thoughts are written from the past, but thank you for caring.  And while written in first person, they're not me speaking.  Thank you both for the comments.  At the same time - I hope you saw the satire.  


mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

4 posted 2004-01-21 09:46 AM


Hey Endless, this is real good poetry. Loaded with commonly said gestures, but backed with real zingers in very stanza. Nice job.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-01-22 12:52 PM


i loved this one

very real
im sure lots of people can relate to it

i likes the repeat you had going
and you ended it very well

hardcore

darkness

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