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darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-01-19 01:08 AM


I hate this
I hate enjoying the pain I feel
I hate lying
I hate being a hassle
I hate disguising depression as a passing thing
I hate hating what I have become

I geuss I hate me.


Reaching
His hand grabs mine
As he pulls me
From where I
Clung to my cliff of
Sanity


Helpless and hopeless
I fall backwards again
Back into my dark, deniable
Lagoon of depression
Once escaped, it is
Impossible to stay away
For the lagoon captivates all who are weak


Note: this was adjusted to fit the policys… email me if you want the original version

© Copyright 2004 Sophie A Ryan - All Rights Reserved
Gothika_07
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since 2004-01-15
Posts 61
new zealand
1 posted 2004-01-19 03:57 AM


HEY!!!!
thnx 4 readn me poem soph
WOT CAN I SAY AMAZING AS EVA...
UR POEMS R ALWAYS EXCELLENT MMMMMMM

AND SEND ME THE "ORIGINAL" VERSION K

xxgothikaxx

Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
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Near golden sunsets
2 posted 2004-01-19 05:01 AM


I still enjoyed it this way. Though, I will admit it does lose a little with the edit.  But, rules are rules are rules.  Thanks for understanding.

-*-*-

Immortality is my illusion.

Endlessecho
Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398
I live within myself
3 posted 2004-01-19 03:49 PM


Well written poem.

My favorite part:

"Reaching
His hand grabs mine
As he pulls me
From where I
Clung to my cliff of
Sanity"



Vagabond
Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163

4 posted 2004-01-23 04:10 PM


Will you send me the full version(original)
e-mail   jhollon4@stu.lee.k12.ky.us

Vagabon the Lost One

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
5 posted 2004-02-10 07:44 PM


hey darkness nice write
i would love the full version
email me at hells_angel_128@hotmail.com

this is me.... like it or not....
its who i am!
i am woman hear me roar

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
6 posted 2004-02-11 01:25 AM


Heyaz Soph!
Oooh i love this particular poem, i love the cliff of sanity part.
Plz plz plz plz plz send me the original one! u know my email, tell me at school if u dont.

Laterz,
Hollow

I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you.

Jelfling
Junior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 21
Indiana
7 posted 2004-02-16 02:32 PM


hey, e-mail me a copy of the original, will you? jllinvil@indiana.edu
Paper Tiger
Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77

8 posted 2004-02-18 03:09 PM


Simple, yet extremely deep.  Both beautiful and dark.
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
9 posted 2004-02-19 09:56 PM


I love it, it is so... I dunno how to put it, Dark and beautiful i guess, like
^^^ said. I would like to see the original, email me at txsblonde22@yahoo.com

~Vampire kisses  

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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