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Shadow Of Face
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Shadow Of Face |
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Ben Junior Member
since 2004-01-17
Posts 21 |
The shadow of face turns next Traffic of thoughts complex Slicing from beneath the skin Lying unfolded bare and thin Sunk in the solitude overdose Two steps to the lost ghost Chained on the outer surface A stone residing cold and nervous Swallowed vain trust in sips Words won’t break out of closed lips Blind cries and breath despise Shots franticly shuffling behind dead eyes The irony of such a red ambition Screaming at a deaf scenario that won’t listen A thousand pieces of self in random streams It’s a valid dream of no themes The pendulum of persistence Fell in aggressive existence In wounds down so slow The naked tension is left to grow Such a repulsive mirror of no reflection So what of expectation It’s a voice of haunting disillusion But of who’s confusion The closed mouth that begs to be fed Or the typhoon that’s chanting in the head |
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Gothika_07 Member
since 2004-01-15
Posts 61new zealand |
THAT WAS AMAZING! UR RHYMING AND FLOW IS EXCELLENT WHILE STILL GIVIN A MEANIN! KEEP ON WRITIN! xxgothikaxx |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
=) i liked this, good job! - River rest upon existence. seek life, |
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2writeis2be Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 45Live in London, but from TX |
nice one! i don't normally like the rhyming ones but this flowed |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Truely moving. The flow is great. I'm saving this. There is so much I like about this piece. I liked how you described ambition as red. "Sunk in the solitude overdose" All your lines were wonderfully crafted. amazing job. ~Lex |
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