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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-12-31 09:50 PM


There's specks in the asphalt
and I lean closer to inspect.
Shards of mirror enbeded in the black.
I stand bavk and see bits and pieces of myself.
An eye, dark and mencing.
A mouth, gaping.
Life changes fast.
And the sky is black.
The fog hangs tight against the street lights.
As I piece my reflection back together.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (01-01-2004 05:04 PM).]

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choshi
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since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184
New York
1 posted 2004-01-01 03:07 PM


Nice! breaking apart - coming together oscillations...I am wondering if "bavk"  and "blavk"   are mispellings, intentional, or a word I have not encountered?  ~C
wintertao
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL
2 posted 2004-01-02 12:00 PM


enjoyed, creative !
Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
3 posted 2004-01-02 08:33 PM


Very creative, very nicely written too.  Nice poem.
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