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eor
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blues & greys

0 posted 2003-12-16 08:33 PM





Literate and stylish
Kissable and quiet
Laughable in silence
That’s what girls dreams are made of

With a girl on your arm
You prance around
With your heart on your sleeve
But yet you are deceived
...don't hold your breath
Turning words into many pronouns
Adjectives can't describe this
More like expletives

At the tip of my tongue
I stand corrected
Lipstick on his collar
You think that was crafty
He just ignores it
Don’t speak I know just what it is
The scars tell me all
Hold your breath because you only make things worse

Literate and stylish
Kissable and quiet
Laughable in silence
That’s what girls dreams are made of

This is me with my eye down the
Scope of a barrel
Remind me not to ever
Act this way again

You try hard to deceive
But I already believe


"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

© Copyright 2003 matt cockrell - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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1 posted 2003-12-16 11:56 PM


Girls, probably one of the hardest species on the planet to trust. lol.  Nice write.

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

eor
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2 posted 2003-12-17 05:36 PM


yep, thanks

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Mad_Hatter
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Canada
3 posted 2003-12-17 11:48 PM


Nicely done as always sir.  
River
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4 posted 2003-12-19 02:47 PM


awww eor, this is sad. =(. well, it was groovy, ok? have a groovy day. =) *hugs*

       - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

mysticpoe
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5 posted 2003-12-20 05:47 PM


eor my man, emotion becomes you lately. I LIKE. The best for the Holidays my fellow poet.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-02-23 03:06 AM


yeah...cool write
kissa~rachelle
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7 posted 2004-02-23 03:27 PM


Nice, but guys are just as hard to trust. But you seem like you arent. I loved te poem.

~Vampire Kisses  

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
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8 posted 2004-02-23 11:26 PM


u say girls r the hardest species to work out?
Gees u obviously hadnt had relationships with men (that i'm glad of on that one level)
they can be happy or sad in a matter of moments before being clear of all emotions watsoever!

i think girls know what they want and men tend to change their minds while with theyre with girls...and thats wat makes them unsure of us!

just my thoughts!

LOR

In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel

Lexy
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9 posted 2004-02-25 09:46 PM


well...I really agree with you.
I love how you wrote this, creative and to the point.
Nice job.
I despise being asociated with women.
(cringe) some are just plain...evil.

darkstar
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Port Richey, Fl, USA
10 posted 2004-02-26 08:13 PM


very taking back sunday-esque
Gemini
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11 posted 2004-02-26 09:49 PM


Oh, sad and potent, nicely written. PS-I've known some guys like this too.
eor
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12 posted 2004-03-01 03:09 AM


thanks for all your comments, but dont take this as a hit against women, menare just as bad, if not worse, this is just a story, perspective...not a dis against the woman as a whole

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19
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From a cradle to a casket
13 posted 2004-03-16 09:52 PM


was the blend of a lot of brand New Songs and Taking back sunday songs was cool.......

Did you mean to do that...

nn
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Posts 75

14 posted 2004-03-18 03:09 PM


Interesting
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