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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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tears falling to the floor the stains on the wood will remain to remind you of every little mistake i've made big enough or small enough to make me cry does that make me weak? pathetic in your eyes? as im contorted in the corner a picture of pain on my face does it tell a thousand words? or just the ones you want to hear? basking in my self pity trying to wipe the tears away to look strong to you to forget the reasons why i'm even here I'll be alright Won't I? maybe, when the light's are turned back on I'll have dried my eyes and I can look normal for you so you won't or can't be embarrassed of me but then you will find the tear stained floor and all my efforts will be thrown back to the ground as i watch you scowl in resentment and i feel the tears coming back but still all i am to you is weak and pathetic you're the only one keeping me alive |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I don't know what to make of this. It's easy to type in a whole lot of lyrics that are related to the feelings you pen. And that is what I've been doing, but those are not my words, and that is not what I want to say. That isn't feedback, that's a more interesting way to say "I feel exactly the same." My friend, maybe we need to polish that floor, so the tears slide right off it. Or maybe you should wait so when that room is flooded and there's no more space to cry, you'll just stop. Grrr, hugs all around, completely loved it, ohmigod it was so well written, heart was aching. No more to be said. Hollow. Courtney. Hollow. Courtney. You just got to see me through another day My body's achin' and my time is at hand And I won't make it any other way [This message has been edited by Hollow_Emptiness (12-16-2004 10:59 PM).] |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
umm yeah im the same as courts at the moment so itw ould be a waste to reply wat she sed to make me cry does that make me weak? pathetic in your eyes? as im contorted in the corner a picture of pain on my face does it tell a thousand words? or just the ones you want to hear? awesome pure genius i say love and empathy dahl (lol sry real short reply not in the mood at the moment to get all emotional on ya) sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
but then you will find the tear stained floor and all my efforts I especially like this---the tear stained floor exposes the efforts to hide... ~Atov |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
"basking in my self pity trying to wipe the tears away to look strong to you to forget the reasons why i'm even here" Thats my favorite...i love this poem. I think i will save....this was beautiful. I ask why, but in my mind, |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
oh lor... ..this brought tears to my eyes.. ..which i think speaks for itself Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"and all my efforts will be thrown back to the ground as i watch you scowl in resentment and i feel the tears coming back but still all i am to you is weak and pathetic" I liked that ending part. Great write, even though it made me sad. lol.  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
Thank you all for replying! this one wasn't really one of my most emotionally attached poems, you might say lol. I just wrote it. did you understand that? or am i just being... me. oh well, im glad you liked it. laura you're the only one keeping me alive |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I hope it's just because it's the holidays that you've stopped posting. I hope you have alot of poems to share with us up your sleeve. I miss seeing your name on the board. Writing helps you understand your feelings, I heard that on TV. Anyway! Write! Mwah! Courts. You just got to see me through another day |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
I wish...I wish I could relate to this. It's wierd. I should write something about the tears that fail me, I dunno. nonetheless this was great stuff. heart choking. - River How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
a picture of pain on my face does it tell a thousand words? or just the ones you want to hear? Wow, I Loved This SO Much. "Trina" Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy... |
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