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Country Side Diversion
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Country Side Diversion |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
This moves, like it always had to Watching the dashes on the road, become a line There’s the ghosts of the past in the ditch This is the spot that I remember well The spot where this material world ends And the mountains, like knives in the landscape Where are we going? “I doubt we ever even knew” What are we doing? “Just finding our way through” This underpass Its lights are blinding me “But we’re going to be okay” That’s what she’d say It’s funny how that country excursion Can turn into the meaning of your life We’re burning gasoline Just like we’re burning you and me Funny how the steering wheel Seems to be the only thing missing That tree was brown and it was cracked Just like so many before it “Loving you forever” into the bark She left the razor in the park And then she touched the train To forget me, to forget her, to forget me Now this stream I thought you’d understand It’s funny how a little pavement Can turn into the rest of your life We used to dream We used to scream I guess it got old for you This is my minute The minute of a man Saying all he can Before he rides the stream The one that floats a dream I guess that dream sank And at the end of this brick wall We’re all going to be okay… |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Wow, amazing. Great write. I love it! ~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
those words flowed like music,i could hear it i my mind,it was beautiful. where in alberta do you live?i live in clagary  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ryan? your writing is just booming lately . . My God you have gone leaps and bounds in a month And the mountains, like knives in the landscape (I love that line) this is bitter beauty |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you so much Littlewing, that means so much to me, I am constantly trying to evolve my writing and make it better. Thank you all for your responses, you're all very dear to me. I live in Airdrie by the way. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
Airdrie,whoa thats so close to me! lol i'm sorry,i know this is a poetry site not a chat boxy roomy thingy..ok is it just me or do i sound alot more ditzy when i'm not writing poetry;D |
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