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Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
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Coastal Texas

0 posted 2003-12-07 09:03 PM


It's cold out tonight,
snow falling thickly
filling tracks and troughs
through the icy crust.

It's late, but so much to do;
I've barely covered this block.
So many snowmen to make.

So many, but the snow falls thick,
muffling my work like gauze.
So many houses left.

And pets. Can't forget the pets,
forever by their masters' side.
Even the fishtanks.

Denny's is calling me
and my belly listens,
but so much still to do.

Every detail must be correct,
even down to the glasses and
the errant snifter of brandy.

The dawn will show my mischief:
suburbanites en masse standing
guard over cloistered homes,
huddled against the cold.

All of pristine snow.
Well, mostly.

Alicat

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Dragon Mistress
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since 2002-08-26
Posts 289
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1 posted 2003-12-07 09:56 PM


Hmm...Interesting...

I LOVE IT!!

~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2003-12-08 05:01 AM


well mostly . . .

*smile*

had me there Ali

Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
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3 posted 2003-12-10 10:07 AM


Thanks guys. While writing this one, the image of a Charles Addams cartoon crept into mind of a man walking home seeing a melting snowman, and a revealed man's suited arm.
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4 posted 2003-12-11 05:06 PM


You know since you said what your vision was, it truly made a lot of sense to me, but brother you would really laugh at what I got out of it before you told me your thoughts.  Don't you just love that poetry does that?

                    
Let there be peace on earth,
and let it begin with me.

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