That dark and ever gripping sadness

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Dark Poetry #4

That dark and ever gripping sadness

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-11-30 11:04 PM

I'm losing pieces from the mirror,
I've attempted to savor myself.
The numbers of the calender,
they steal and I fall further.

In the gritty water my bones float.
So light, like I've always been,
so frail, and there's a beckoning in the wind.

There's a thickness in my soul a mile wide.
I'm not easily cut,
despite the sharpness of your lips,
and the product of your breath.
Your words,
there's a crakle,
then a string of smoke dancing in the cold.
A musty black covers my mirror
and for once I look upon my reflection.
actuality,
possibilly a perfect depiction.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (11-30-2003 11:06 PM).]

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

1 posted 2003-11-30 11:38 PM

Strong imagery, powerfull, and a little chilling!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2003-12-02 07:52 AM

Wonderfullly done!

Loverlost
Member

since 2003-11-25

Posts 89
UK

3 posted 2003-12-02 10:21 AM

Very well written. I feel for you, honestly.

Love is like Mumps.....the older you are when you catch it....the worse it feels

xmutexelationx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-16

Posts 15
AmongstTheCharredFieldsOfSnow

4 posted 2003-12-02 09:01 PM

Wow. This is great. I liked the whole mirror thing. Very nice.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2003-12-02 11:50 PM

Lexy-
This is without doubt, one of the best poems I have read in a while. Unbelievable job. Great write.

Tomer

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

6 posted 2003-12-03 11:31 PM

why thank you. wow, what a compliment.

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