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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2003-11-25 12:06 PM



Shhh hehehehe

SHhhhh

Little ones innocent of logical thought
Harsh cruelty engulfing life
Massive warm
silence
all is still

Pale recovery
remaining shoe
...

I watched from a distance as the heat rose
The walls caved in
I can still see it happen
Try to see it happen

Very playful imagination
What didn't happen
the secrets forever lost,
but I know
I watched it happen
I watched them burn
hurt
i can still see

Stray bolt of fire
Apathy
Collaspe into something else

Deeper in the Earth
the foundation of hell

Ignorance and rotten empty shells
Numb rattled stare
I know

Cold
Reporters will come
The law will come
family
They will all come

I'm bleeding
My secret of what happened
Shhhh
Their burning screams
Shhh

This blood flows freely now
...    ...      ...
Flows and flows
Drip by drip

Quiet

drip      drip       drip    drip

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
River
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since 2003-09-16
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1 posted 2003-11-25 12:17 PM


ooo kaayy...somebody's been watching the Outer Limits again...Craig, i told you, that show is bad for you. baaad. uh oh. i hear something. *turns white* hee hee. hehehe. ok, i'll stop now, . if you where trying to make this gruesome...er...good job, *gag* talk to ya laters.

        - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

wranx
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2 posted 2003-11-25 12:15 PM


A nice little tale of what can happen when feelings go unchecked...

Good for folks to be reminded, huh?

That IS what you were tryin for here, wasn't it? Cause if not, I can see were this could get moderated for gratuitous violence.


Nice write itchy....vivid

littlewing
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3 posted 2003-11-25 12:18 PM


Craig,

you describe Death here exactly as you have titled . . . Cut and Quiet

well done
xxoo

Brad Majors
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4 posted 2003-11-25 02:43 PM


I like this piece because of its harsh rawness.
green_itchy_stuff
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5 posted 2003-11-25 11:49 PM


Such a variety of responses, Yeah this is a little violent, but I didnt want to write the way I usually do where its just life bothering me.  I wanted to get a little gritty and I did.  Sorry if it offended anyone.

GIS

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[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

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