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Mad_Hatter
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0 posted 2003-11-21 07:51 PM


We decided not to go there today
We’re going to stop being each other for a while
This is maybe the first time I saw mascara run

I always knew I’d miss her
From the first time I never got to kiss her
Listen closely to me
I’m whispering through smoke
Just so I can reach you

I never meant for the pavement to crack
I never meant for the windshield to break
I never meant to never say goodbye
Piano keys
And memories
Piano keys
And hurting me
Piano keys
And letting go
Piano keys
And knowing why

They put you in a line on the ground
But they can’t ever take you
Maggots will decompose and break you
But they can’t ever take you
And I’ll walk to the bench
Where burdens broke
And I’ll remember
The last time we ever spoke

I’ll always feel responsible
And I’ll never forget
I’ll always feel accountable
But I’ll never forget
Metal and harness
Couldn’t keep you alive
Oh what a day, to forget goodbye
The story goes:  I never tried…


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Brad Majors
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Georgia
1 posted 2003-11-23 11:27 PM


I really liked this poem it makes you think
Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
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some where deep in the shadows
2 posted 2003-11-23 11:44 PM


wow lots of pain...it really makes you think "what if"
once again great song-likeness

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
3 posted 2003-11-24 12:51 PM


well as stories go this one is a doozy, man those 'what ifs' always seem to get ya...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
4 posted 2003-11-25 11:40 PM


Wow, I don't know that there's much else I could say about this poem.
Amazing piece, thank you for sharing and it's going in my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2003-11-26 03:31 PM


I am glad you decided to post this...

lots of feeling felt through your words.

M

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