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Dark Poetry #4

With a dash of sanity

Jeremy Redinger
Junior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 46

0 posted 2003-11-19 05:34 PM

Dragging down a desperate trail,
Lost hope -
Leak unrepaired.

Continue on for want of breath.
Stay the same,
Empty...
but for a rock shell of self.

Eyelids weigh heaviest
- in the tired hours;
Nothing's wrong,
Or too numb to know...
You know?

Never the same,
You or it -
whatever 'it' is.
Maybe 'it' is tired,
I am.

Hope all around
and yet no care to reach
no hope to touch -
Been burnt and bled too much
too dry.

The rock is strong and sturdy,
almost unbreakable.

Unbroken - that's me.

But dead and empty,
all the same.

-

©2003 Jeremy Redinger.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

1 posted 2003-11-20 12:42 PM

this poem was very good. i feel the same.
a means without an end and all hope lost
I hope to see more of your work.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-11-20 10:18 PM

Nothing's wrong,
Or too numb to know...
You know?

I definately know.
nicely said, even though you sound confused.
That adds to the poem.
I'm adding this because I have been feeling it so much lately.
Something inside me is tired and is not getting any rest.
thought provoking.
~Lex

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