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cusick
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since 2003-07-27
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0 posted 2003-11-09 03:38 PM



Enclosed.
Safe.
Warm.

cocooned in this
cosy enclosure
forever.

Then pain.
Thrusting, pushing,
sudden gushing

loud primeval cry
of blessed release.

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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-11-09 03:51 PM


Birth.

(death?)

Death.

(birth?)

(I've been told I confuse the two.)

I liked the ambiguity--(letting me decide? I never will yanno ) and yes, the orgasmic quality of word choice too makes the thought go down yummy. (go down yummy? sigh. I'm always typing ambiguities m'self. )

Well it was good for me c.


Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
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Canada
2 posted 2003-11-09 04:35 PM


I like this alot, to me it's saying we are born into death...the innevitable truth.  Powerfull write.
SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
3 posted 2003-11-09 04:54 PM


Emerging from the womb...that warm secure place. Fetal. And then the blessed event! Wow. That woke me up!..hehe
Love,
Terri~

cusick
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4 posted 2003-11-10 03:52 AM


Thank you Mad Hatter for replying. Maggie
cusick
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5 posted 2003-11-10 03:54 AM


Hello Shara, nice to hear from you again. Maggie
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