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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2003-11-03 03:53 PM


Her hands flutter, flutter,
incandescent in headlight flame --
fingers sprouting shadows
which lengthen, lengthen,
then vanish.

Can you see the shadows
I make, her body asks.
But her eyes have changed
to the color of feldspar
and jasper -- bits of mica
sprinkling music.

Such slow flashing,
I'd like to respond,
but my mouth is fast shut.
Words do not become wings,
and wings do not fly
independent of body
is what I'd like to say.

Sometime past starlight,
before the first rays of morning,
we find our respective beds.
Cold and corrugated
shudder and shakes, an urgency
I will not take pains to decode.

Not this night
is what I'd like to say.

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-11-03 10:12 PM


ahh Mikey . . . this this
I saw her there . . .
before . . .
illuminated and confused
and you debating . . .
those chills

I love your picture!
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-03-2003 10:14 PM).]

cusick
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2 posted 2003-11-04 09:22 AM


A very interesting read B ut are you going to take the plunge? Maggie
bsquirrel
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3 posted 2003-11-04 12:37 PM


Thanks, Sue.

Which plunge would that be, cusick?

Mikey

coyote
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4 posted 2003-11-04 08:08 PM


Into the post modern scene are we, Mike?
If not this is still a superb metaphoric relationship write.

Very well done as always.

Thanks,
coyote 8)

mysticpoe
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5 posted 2003-11-05 10:58 AM


Great poem,

"Sometime past starlight," this line is outstanding. A first for me. Nice.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

mysticpoe
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6 posted 2003-11-05 10:58 AM


Greta poem,

"Sometime past starlight," this line is outstanding. A first for me. Nice.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2003-11-05 12:23 PM


Thank you, both. And post-modern -- nah. Poetry of all stripes -- yah.
coyote
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8 posted 2003-11-05 09:01 PM


Either way ya got my vote, Mike.
fwiw?
Your writes rock.
CB 8)

passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-11-08 12:52 PM


imagery...very nice
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10 posted 2005-08-06 11:49 AM


mikey, you know I've always loved your writing.. this one takes the cake for sure. I think it's one of my favorites.
littlewing
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11 posted 2005-08-07 11:58 AM


Oh man, for a minute I thought it was YOU.
(bummer)

Midnitesun
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Gaia
12 posted 2005-08-07 03:48 PM


pout pout pout
chant chant chant

where is mikey?
where is mikey?
where is mikey?

EveGnosis
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13 posted 2005-08-13 01:03 AM


just when they thought he walked into oblivion...

holy...

where have you been ol' friend?? and to make a comeback with something like this after all these years of separation? wow, i just finished playing a role of a very popular rock star in this flick, and i had to go way back to get into the role... way back, to the days of old. and you were there! yes!! years ago, you were there... chastising me for quotes of "toe cheese" and such when silence was tasteful!!! lol

anyhoo, i missed ya bro!

mike

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

littlewing
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14 posted 2005-08-14 11:03 PM


naw, someone brought up an old post, mike - look up . . .  *bummer*
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