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qtpieelmo
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

0 posted 2003-10-27 06:20 PM


ROLLER COASTER

Up and down my heart goes,
loving with all I've got.
How happy I am when you notice me,
how sad when I think you've forgot.
This ride it goes on forever,
and at times I just want out.
Loop 'da loop, around again.
What is this all about?
Together forever,
then just friends,
you say you still love me,
but then the ride ends.
No more phone calls,
not even a quick letter.
Is that too hard?
If I forgot you would that be better?
Yes the ride was worth it,
but the fun ended too fast.
I want to ride again.
I want to make it last.
Savor every loop and turn,
appreciate the ride a little more.
Let go of the screams freely,
not cover my eyes like before!

~Appreciate what you've got now and try to make every moment memorable because before you know it, it may be taken from ya!~

(RIP DAD--I Miss You!!)

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

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Asian Rain
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since 2003-10-11
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1 posted 2003-10-28 06:09 AM


"I want to ride again.
I want to make it last.
Savor every loop and turn"

Life and relationships with their ups and downs, indeed so often like a rollercoaster ride.  Wonderful write, enjoyed!

qtpieelmo
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
2 posted 2003-11-02 05:30 PM


Thanx Asian Rain!!

ELMO

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-11-08 01:15 PM


this hits home, very close
click1
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since 2003-03-25
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4 posted 2003-11-09 04:57 PM


AHHhh...such is life..well done it looks good
on the page and sounds good to the ear..tears and smiles..what a range reached in such a short poem...Good job!
                        thanx!

Click

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
5 posted 2003-11-09 04:59 PM


Tears :'(
qtpieelmo
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
6 posted 2003-11-09 07:11 PM


Thank you sooo much for the nice replies--I'm glad you were able to relate to it in some way!!

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

redrobin21865
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since 2003-11-09
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Florida, USA
7 posted 2003-11-09 09:27 PM


very touching and very truthful.  really enjoyed it


Brad Majors
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8 posted 2003-11-13 12:39 PM


nice
ranidae_poet
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since 2003-11-05
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Texas,USA
9 posted 2003-11-13 02:16 PM


I love the last line.  this is really good. thanks for sharing.
WildPoet
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since 2003-11-10
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California
10 posted 2003-11-13 03:18 PM


Great work! Where do I buy a ticket?

WildPoet

qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
11 posted 2003-11-14 12:18 PM


LOL--thanx all--You can have my ticket WildPoet!!

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

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