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*Inque Monroe*
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since 2003-10-18
Posts 43
No where special

0 posted 2003-10-26 02:24 PM


(Incase you are wondering NO this does NOT support suicide, I'm not even sure she dies.)

Here I lie
I dream of nothing but you
Nothing but your eyes
Nothing but your face
I wish to hold you
To hold you so tight
But your gone
No longer in my sight

My dreams are like purgatori
A lost life of which I loved
God, I wish I had you.
But its over, we're done,
you left, my whole world has come undone

When you left you took my soul
and now here I lie waiting
for the last drop
and for me to die
and while I lay here
growing oh so numb
I dream of your smile
Your touch upon my skin
your lips pressed to mine

I know its wrong,
this shouldn't be done
Please come and save me
I wait and I cry
But nothing ever happens
The phone never rings
The door never knocks
You've forgotten me
I feel so numb.
What have I become?

© Copyright 2003 Victoria Ware - All Rights Reserved
TasteOfOctober
Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94

1 posted 2003-10-26 05:15 PM


BRAVO...I felt that.

I am not a man because I am of men. I am a man because I am of the Spirit, among men.

Dragon Mistress
Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289
Washington, USA.
2 posted 2003-10-26 07:12 PM


beautiful...wow...*tear*

~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

Soul Sepulchre
Junior Member
since 2003-10-19
Posts 29
Tennessee, USA
3 posted 2003-10-27 02:09 PM


Beautiful, depressing, and your style. Great work as always baby, ^^ -hug hug hug- keep it up - well, not so depressingly, but yeah, lol. Love ya.

Jeremy -
"The spirits of the dead, who stood in life before thee, are again in death around thee". Edgar Allen Poe

~*DrAgOnFLY*~
Junior Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 29
Haven of Abyss
4 posted 2003-10-31 09:08 PM


seems everything i read these days reminds me of...well you know. "the pain is gone, yet the memories live on" its all so bittersweet *sigh* it's a good one...


"You laugh because I'm different, I laugh because you're all the same"
Forever 'N Always <><
~*DrAgOnFLY*~

[This message has been edited by ~*DrAgOnFLY*~ (10-31-2003 09:09 PM).]

*Inque Monroe*
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since 2003-10-18
Posts 43
No where special
5 posted 2003-11-06 03:48 PM


Thanks
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
6 posted 2003-11-08 01:32 PM


oh yes...she dies in one way or another...I know "her" well, very personally
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
7 posted 2004-04-05 05:30 PM


Amazing... I felt this....

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
8 posted 2004-04-06 12:26 PM


....Heartfelt

Hollow,

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

toxic_outroar
New Member
since 2004-03-22
Posts 6

9 posted 2004-04-06 12:49 PM


i feel this i really do, went through the exact same thing.
Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
10 posted 2004-04-08 08:12 AM


I liked this, well done.

"I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne

Fleur
Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103

11 posted 2004-04-10 12:57 PM


You can not imagine how much I cried when I red your poem. This poem is like written to me, and of my situation right now.... -he left.... and will never ever come again... ohh....
*Inque Monroe*
Junior Member
since 2003-10-18
Posts 43
No where special
12 posted 2004-04-10 05:55 PM


Fleur, I'm sorry it made you cry..I didn't think it could have that affect, I think most girls (and alot of guys to girls) have been in this situation, I know I have and I felt like I wanted to express it though words and I guess it worked. I'm sorry the situation in my poem happens to be yours now. As to everyone else, Thank you for the feedback and please give feedback on my others as well. ^_^

What does it matter, we will all die in the end anyway.

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