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C_ROK06
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0 posted 2003-10-23 04:21 PM



I’m lost
Can’t find myself
I’m lost
In my own selfishness
My own longing
Longing to belong
To become what I’m not
To be loved by all, not just some

I wanted to be part of the crowd
To be noticed by all
To be a “normal” teen
Living amongst savage beasts
I thought we were friends
I thought we were pals
Till you stabbed me in the back
And showed me how

How I could be so stupid
To think I could ever belong
Belong to a bunch of ignorant liars and thieves
We are not alike
We are not the same
Now I know how much my pride got in the way

It took who I am
And shred it to pieces
Leaving only what you wanted from me
My mind was consumed
My heart was devoured
My life was converted into one of you beasts

Well I got what I wanted
I am part of the pack
Part of the crowd that ate me as a snack
I watch with you
I stalk with you
I hunt with you
I run with you
I am part of you

I thought this would be exactly what I had always wanted
Instead I am in pain
I feel as if I’m going insane
I am lost between what was me
And what I am now
I’m gone

[This message has been edited by C_ROK06 (10-23-2003 04:59 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-10-23 04:53 PM





Welcome to Passions~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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C_ROK06
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since 2003-10-23
Posts 49

2 posted 2003-10-23 04:58 PM


Haha. Thanx. ^_^

" So let us then try to climb the mountain, not by stepping on what is below us, but to pull us up at what is above us, for my part at the stars; amen

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-10-23 06:02 PM


I feel that way too sometimes
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-10-24 02:00 PM


It's true. Sometimes in trying to become a part of something we lose ourselves in the process.

Thanks for the read and welcome to Passions.

Check your e mail for a special greeting of appreciation!


C_ROK06
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since 2003-10-23
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5 posted 2003-10-24 05:17 PM


thanx for the e-mail. greeting cards... kool. that could come in handy sometime. ^_^ yeah... i wrote this poem at the begining of last month. I was going through some stuff and this was the outcome i guess you could say. there is a lot more to it than that, but yeah... would take too long to explain. haha. well tanx u guyz for all the input, ill keep posting and ill be looking forward to all the replies. g2g. God Bless -vik
*Inque Monroe*
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since 2003-10-18
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No where special
6 posted 2003-10-24 07:10 PM


Really good, I've felt like that before...
Soul Sepulchre
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since 2003-10-19
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Tennessee, USA
7 posted 2003-10-24 10:13 PM


I know exactly where you're coming from amigo. I've wanted to fit in quite a few times only to realize that, "hey - they're idiots". :-D

Jeremy -
"The spirits of the dead, who stood in life before thee, are again in death around thee". Edgar Allen Poe

lauren03
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since 2002-01-04
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oh, usa
8 posted 2003-10-25 05:49 PM


good write........ much thought went into that poem. i think though that the "in crowd" isn't always the best place to be. i never fit in with them people and i don't much like them. i have the few good friends i have and i think that's the best way to go. get yourself out before you can't......
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
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9 posted 2003-10-26 08:47 AM


Your Poem Is Deep And True Everyone Looses Apart Of Themselves When Trying To Be What Others Want Them To Be And Your Poem Explains It All So Clearly.......Hope To See More From You~!~

C_ROK06
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since 2003-10-23
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10 posted 2003-10-27 07:10 PM


Yup, we all definetly need help with this at some point in our lives. everyone wants to fit in with those around them, and in the process, lose what made them well... themselves. That is definetly not the way to go. haha. yeah... ^_^

" So let us then try to climb the mountain, not by stepping on what is below us, but to pull us up at what is above us, for my part at the stars; amen

River
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my own little world
11 posted 2003-10-29 09:01 PM


"I wanted to be part of the crowd
To be noticed by all
To be a “normal” teen
Living amongst savage beasts
I thought we were friends
I thought we were pals
Till you stabbed me in the back
And showed me how"

yup, i've lived this before...totally understand where your coming from there...good job on this write=)

         - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

qtpieelmo
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12 posted 2003-11-02 05:34 PM


Awe--Ur not lost!! Ur right here among people who care!!

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

passing shadows
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13 posted 2003-11-08 01:13 PM


I can relate to this...and I'm 34
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