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iMMuNe
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since 2002-07-23
Posts 49
Maine, USA

0 posted 2003-10-22 05:38 PM


Something

The light shines through the darkness that admists
The demons flee as it penetrates harder than fists,
Time runs fast as the hell-fire begins,
Wrapping around me as an enclosed cage - ravaging within.

Everytime something is said,
Want to turn myself inside out to show what I bled,
I wish there was a fountain for all the tears I shed,
Maybe a dollar for everytime I wanna be dead.

To save everyone from what I've become,
Help the people that haven't changed into something undone,
Bleed-cry-die,
Its all the same one- life.

If life was only a proven perdicament of a test to sanity,
Id be standing right up here saying how proud I am to be,
But it's nothing like that - exactly,
It's time to hide beneath the mess and rest so no one else will save me.

  

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Asian Rain
Member
since 2003-10-11
Posts 73

1 posted 2003-10-23 11:32 AM


Neat write!  I love these lines:

"Everytime something is said,
Want to turn myself inside out to show what I bled"

Asia

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
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2 posted 2003-10-23 06:06 PM


cool...I understand this well
PeaceInEverything
Junior Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 31
Ohio, United States
3 posted 2003-10-24 01:20 PM


I liked your poem.  I really liked this line :

It's time to hide beneath the mess and rest so no one else will save me.

I feel the emotion from this poem and thank you for it.

cusick
Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668

4 posted 2003-10-24 04:11 PM


I think someone will always save you if you know where to look. Loved the poem. Maggie
*Inque Monroe*
Junior Member
since 2003-10-18
Posts 43
No where special
5 posted 2003-10-24 07:05 PM


I really like this poem I really like the lines:

"Time runs fast as the hell-fire begins,
Wrapping around me as an enclosed cage - ravaging within"

Great work.

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