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mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
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0 posted 2003-10-20 02:00 PM



I cupped my hands
with that hollow I was holding.
Looking,
asking for the contents
of our condoned connection
Once said, then aliened.
From the moment you knew,
we traveled the brightness
of our own wanting.
Crossing the darkness,
you suggested bridges,
be sought for the journey; we’re
On.
Or did you stubble -
Like those walks we talked about.
But,
you were never there
As a failing sonnet
of our desire.
You continued, with more.
And I did digest - long ago
still looking,
from that cemetery you
placed me in.

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
1 posted 2003-10-20 04:11 PM


poe-fantastic write
i really like this one, you set up a scene the with that contrasting coorinaditing conjunction (but) you changed it all around...lovley lovley

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

2 posted 2003-10-21 01:03 PM


Thanks again eor. I thought the ending would sneak up on the reader. Thanks again for reading. Later.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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