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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2003-10-19 07:25 PM



Darling child
Little girl
Take the doses of artificial prayer
Lively living death of lust
Demented mind
Dirty deeds
A wasted whore drugs infest

She never sees, never learns
The same always and forever
Her lower lip is raw and used
Laugh and play just a joke
Laugh her entire life away
Intense insane
Perception fade

A chance at last, finally
Ruined life, pitiful
Tap tap tap
Realize squeeze
All in all she goes this way
Maybe one day she'll understand
Ignorance

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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1 posted 2003-10-19 11:42 PM


Understanding ignorance. Interesting. You might have meant foul, instead of fowl. "artificial prayer," I loved that part. Nicely done, it was very graphic.
~Lex

green_itchy_stuff
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2 posted 2003-10-20 02:10 PM


I still have confusion with my spelling.  Ill designate a dictionary and put it to use. lol
Actually the poem is about my sister, kinda sad.
Thanx.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

green_itchy_stuff
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Posts 1929
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3 posted 2003-10-20 02:14 PM


Actually I did just look it up and I guess Im a feather face.  oops! lol.

It was supposed to have been foul.
GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2003-10-20 04:12 PM


sad how some people nver learn, but good write greeny i did enjoy this!

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

blackhalo
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5 posted 2003-10-22 01:11 AM


"Intense insane
Perception fade"

Whoaw *couldn't decide whether to say whoa or wow*  This piece was so raw, it had me on edge, and at the same time, it was very well composed!  I loved it, from the very top to the very bottom.   *add*
~Alicia

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-10-22 06:15 PM


"Maybe one day she'll understand
Ignorance "

If she lives that long that will be a very rough day.

Sorry I didn't reply sooner, but this one hit so close to home I honestly didn't know what to say...

ouch?


green_itchy_stuff
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7 posted 2003-10-23 11:02 AM


thank you all.  Sometimes people just cant stop.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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