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Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
I leaned on our forbidden wall the one you had me up against the first time we made love it seemed as if you thought I shouldn't be there without you. You held her hand impatiently it looked so obvious... She looked my way and half-ass smiled I grinned and thought "So how do you like my sloppy seconds, Sweetie?" You kissed her on the mouth (and made damn sure I saw) my jealousy would be your sweetest revenge (that is, if I let it be seen) You noticed the careless look I masqueraded around but I saw Hell through your eyes like I always had when another guy looked at me. The sun started to come out of hiding and into my eyes so I walked away from my spot and by the both of you swaying my hips and flicking my ashes on her shoe. I disappear around the corner and make my way home... praying the whole way that you'll be calling me tonight. [This message has been edited by Defective (10-15-2003 07:42 PM).] |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I liked this, it was a poem about a common issue, there was nothing vague about it, it was intigueingly honest. Well done.  ~Lex |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
i agree with lex... lol and ive felt this... damn it sux, jealousy sux so bad There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
woah, you made me do a double take, i read the sloppy seconds part and was like what...intresting write... "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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