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blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO

0 posted 2003-10-14 01:34 AM



It likes me most when I'm alone
Fading quietly into night
When the liquor in my shattered veins
Fails to end my dreary plight

When every tear is wasted
In the sham upon my pillow
That's when it's call is heard
Through the leaves of the willow.

It beckons me from incessant sleep
And loves me all the same
As if I actually wanted it,
The hatred of this game.

When at night the clock doth toll
The hour of four a.m.
And I am still bound to life
While awaiting sleep's requiem

It crawls within my loneliness
And finds it's shelter there
When all I ever wanted from life
Was you, with me, to share.

Instead I am left to decay
In my pool of salty tears
And wish that I could get back
All of my wasted years

No good would it do me, though,
As I couldn't spend them with you.
And every ounce of life
Would be wasted for moments few.

And then, as a lark, I hear it behind me,
Awaiting my newfound despair
And feeds upon the crimson blood
I've shed in my lonely chair.

When, at once, it's deed is done,
I'm exhausted from the time
It took to take my life away.
All the while the fault was mine.

© Copyright 2003 Alicia R - All Rights Reserved
GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
1 posted 2003-10-15 01:45 AM


hmm don't udnerstand it all... But it hurts, I know it hurts...

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Asian Rain
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 73

2 posted 2003-10-15 01:42 PM


I was with you all the way until the last line. Pain just sort of oozes from each line.  Good write!

Asia

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
3 posted 2003-10-15 04:09 PM


funny what we do to ourselves, i understand you completly here, fantastic write...

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
4 posted 2003-10-16 01:36 AM


Thanks, to the three of you, for your replies.  I appreciate the read.  
And Asia, in the end, aren't we truly the ones who have inflicted all of our pain?  What good is blame?  
Thanks again.
~Alicia

swow finix
Junior Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 14
here but nowhere now
5 posted 2003-10-17 07:37 AM


blackhalo, i am new at this site, and yours was the first poem i seen. i don't mean to discriminate but i truely expected a lot of lame poems on this site. i was wrong. after reading yours i checked out some others and was greatly inspired. i went back to yours again to try and pick it appart. but it was simply amazing. being one struck with pain more then i think is truely neccesary i can relate to your words. and it is an amazing poem with great use of words that had me scrambling for a dictionary more then once. your poem deeply moved me with its' craft and art, along with impoving my vocabulary.

thanx for sharing the gift

~
swow finix

~be who you want-believe what you want~
          -love who you want-

PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return
6 posted 2003-10-17 08:27 PM


I get it. Enough said.
blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
7 posted 2003-10-18 02:55 AM


swow,
I am honored and oh-so-humbled by your response!  I am amazed!  Thanks so much!!

Pain,
Yeah, I know... Thanks for the read and the reply.

I appreciate it guys!
~Alicia

[This message has been edited by blackhalo (10-18-2003 02:57 AM).]

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
8 posted 2003-10-18 04:55 AM


damn this was good
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