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CobyFeelsMyPain
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since 2003-10-12

Posts 6

0 posted 2003-10-13 01:34 PM

summer

shall i compare thee to a summer's day?
you make me burn and get all hot
and sweat like a pig
you remind me of the burning feel of concrete and bare feet
nasty sticky melting ice cream dripping all over my fingers
little children laughing and running and bumping into me
the disgusting salt taste of the sea
you remind me of irritating tourists with fat flabby legs
men's bare chest with the outline of their t-shirt scorched into their
flesh
you remind me of the dry thirst that lingers at the back of my throat
while all the nearby stalls sell coke
for £1.50
and of the shape of my sandals burnt into my feet
while flies and wasps ruin my picnic

lastly you remind me of the sickly farting sound of a bottle of sun lotion
as it leaks out like excrement,
i hate summer and i hate you.
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Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2003-10-13 02:16 PM

Haha... this is amazing. Shakespeare would roll in his grave. I know exactly what you mean, summer is disgusting, I love how you twisted it around into an insult. On second thought, maybe Shakespeare would like this... he was pretty keen on insults.

I could picture you walking around on a strand, sneering at everything, about where you mentioned children bumping into you was when I got the actual image in my head... nice work there.

Just don't show this to whoever it's about.

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

CobyFeelsMyPain
New Member

since 2003-10-12

Posts 6

2 posted 2003-10-13 03:24 PM

Thank you very much.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

3 posted 2003-10-15 04:40 PM

very intresting, yes very intresting indeed

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

4 posted 2003-10-15 09:24 PM

lol...if you hated all of the seasons, i wonder what this insult would be like. maybe you should move to Montana and learn to appreciate Summer more after a *slightly chilly* Winter

this was not as poetic as it was amusing to me, but good job either way =).

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

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