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gpc
Junior Member
since 2003-03-01
Posts 43


0 posted 2003-10-12 02:13 PM


A FRIEND'S END


Everything you said,
I remember.
Everything you did,
I remember.
Everytime I loved you,
I remember.
Everytime you walked away,
I remember.

Every time I die,
I'll remember.


A short one but heartfelt none the less.

[This message has been edited by gpc (10-12-2003 02:23 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 gpc - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-10-12 02:33 PM


Ohh man gp - seems as if I relive these emotions daily

Much Peace, m'friend
xxoo

Mad_Hatter
Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
2 posted 2003-10-12 02:42 PM


Simple, but very beautiful and oh can I relate to it.  Keep it up
eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
3 posted 2004-03-01 03:24 AM


i just brought this back from the past because you were so harsh on vagabond for no reason...maube before you so harshly lash out at someone for an objective point of view, look at your own work first, and out your advice to your own work...
gpc
Junior Member
since 2003-03-01
Posts 43

4 posted 2004-03-01 01:36 PM


yeah the point of this poem would be the repition, it is used to a poignant effect and is obviously used on purpose. I find it slightly disturbing that you trawled through my back catalogue, found the 'worst' poem you could and then posted it up. I've developed a fait bit since I posted this. If you're trying to stop some supposed tit for tat war, why are you doing this? Not very well thought out was it.
darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-03-02 01:17 AM


no eor. \
he did have a reason
he was standing up for wat he believes in.

and personally i think this poem is actually good. ever heard of reading between the lines eor?

i felt this one GPC. nice work

no one gives a s**t, as long as you smile.

"And I swear that i dont have a gun"- Kurt Cobain

Gothika_07
Member
since 2004-01-15
Posts 61
new zealand
6 posted 2004-03-02 01:28 AM


Yeh i agree wiv soph and Gpc.
powerful short sharp and indepth
love ur writin always will

gothika

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
7 posted 2004-03-02 08:10 AM


That was good and I liked it.

GIS

Why live for gold when you can be happy?

[...and the work, it was fun.]-Kurt Cobain

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
8 posted 2004-03-02 06:02 PM


This is actually quite a good poem, i liked it, its powerful.

Hollow

However long the night, the dawn will break.

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