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Dark Poetry #4

Melancholy day dream

Ada'doLisdo'ti
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since 2002-12-10

Posts 123
California

0 posted 2003-12-03 05:40 PM

Melancholy day dream, of past life
A tempest full of pain and strife
I laughed as they drug me, away
I didn't want to stay
I was tricked into taking my life
Look there is no blood only ink on the knife
But they do not believe
They think I deceive
Why can't they conceive
This isn't reality
It’s only a dream
It’s only me being me
Its all melancholy
The way they made me
Drugged so endlessly
Till I walk mindlessly

Just Like Them......

The sweetest rose is one you'll die for...

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-04 10:55 AM

Interesting piece

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

2 posted 2003-12-04 08:21 PM

Nice flow to it..very thought provoking. Good work.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

3 posted 2003-12-05 09:05 AM

well done

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

4 posted 2003-12-05 09:25 PM

I liked this, has dimensional depth. Nice write.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Purple Poet On Wheels
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since 2002-06-21

Posts 145
Pittsburgh/Edinboro, PA

5 posted 2003-12-06 10:52 AM

"Look there is no blood only ink on the knife"

The best line of the poem.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-12-07 06:26 PM

Albert:

this gave me a distinct impression
of suffocating beneath society
well done

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