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Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
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0 posted 2003-10-03 08:04 PM


I bent myself, so that I would fit
This didn’t work for you
Why did I think it would for me?
Sometimes I can only wonder
If everything is how I feel…
When you reach the end
I’ll be waiting here for you
We’re just water after all
Burn me down a solemn temple
And blow out another river
I smelled the heat, so that I would glow
This never worked for me
Why did you think it would work for you?
Sometimes I can only dream
Of having to connect for you…
When you look my way
I’ll be touching sober ground
We’re just fire after all
Build me up a mighty stature
And then send me on my way

© Copyright 2003 Ryan - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-10-03 08:52 PM


Smile. I am liking this muchly.

on to the next!

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-10-03 08:57 PM


mmmm...
this touched me.
brillant and moving.

pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence
3 posted 2003-10-04 03:32 PM


awesome....
Asian Rain
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 73

4 posted 2003-10-11 10:17 PM


I really liked this a lot. Your opening line "I bent myself, so that I would fit" really got my attention by as a very familiar sensation. How many times have we all tried to shape ourselves to fit into someone's life or exptectations. Enjoyed the read very much!
eor
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since 2002-09-26
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blues & greys
5 posted 2003-10-12 02:27 AM


very nice sir very nice

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-10-12 12:58 PM


Ryan:

Ohh I do adore these lines:

We’re just water after all
Burn me down a solemn temple
And blow out another river

amazing , m'friend
yes, it is all we are, isnt it?
simple yet soo complicated
xxoo

cusick
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since 2003-07-27
Posts 668

7 posted 2003-10-12 01:31 PM


The images you portray gives one food for thought. Maggie
Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
8 posted 2003-10-13 08:08 PM


Thank you all for your responses.  Yes, we are water, a thing that we take to be so simple, yet what we are in actuality is so complex, you're all so wonderful thank you.
passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2004-05-17 04:12 AM


excellent!
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