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ShannonMarie
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since 2003-09-09
Posts 55
in a state of being

0 posted 2003-10-02 11:38 AM



He sees me as a shadow,
dancing on the wall,
but oh how my heart beats for him,
and I'm starting to fall.

We are just friends I say,
but now I want more,
shuting out my feelings,
before he even opened the door.

Sometimes I feel invisable,
or maybe he is too blind to see,
the purest of devotion I give,
to him from me.

I long for him each day,
hoping he will see and time will tell,
so now I wallow in my misery,
I created my own personal hell.

love like you will never be hurt

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Tourniquet
Junior Member
since 2003-09-18
Posts 13

1 posted 2003-10-02 11:48 AM


This is a really beautiful poem, with alot of emotion.. that really came through strong.

I have known these feelings in my life

He sees me as a shadow,
dancing on the wall,

I love the opening lines..they really drew me into the poem.

Peace.

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