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SharaRose
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0 posted 2003-09-25 01:24 PM


I'm Not Your Indent, Darling


I'm not your indent.
I'm not your comma.
I'm not your in-between
I'm not your sign off end.
You know the one with the *darling.*
I was, and always had been a friend.

I'm not your comma
I'm not your indent
I'm not the body in-between
the darlings you sent.

I'm not your nothing,
I am something.
You would have known that
Had you taken to the time,
And saw my true intent.

Now you pitch your fit
because my emotions
and my being are all
spent.

I won't come back
bend to your commands
Do what you demand
Your orders came, and went.

I'm not your indent.
I'm not your end.
It's all spent.
DARLING!


© Copyright 2003 Shara - All Rights Reserved
vlraynes
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1 posted 2003-09-25 02:02 PM



Nice 'angry' vent here, SharaRose.

Hugs to you...
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

SharaRose
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2 posted 2003-09-25 04:16 PM


Yes ma'am people do get that way. It's human to do that. I'm open-minded enough to know people don't get angry without reason. back at ya.
SharaRose @-->--

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vlraynes
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3 posted 2003-09-25 04:22 PM



Of course...there is always a reason...
I hope you didn't think I was suggesting otherwise.

Wrote quite an angry vent myself once...
felt good to get it out.
I hope this did the same for you.

Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

SharaRose
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4 posted 2003-09-25 04:29 PM


Thank you Vicky for understanding this. I appreciate. Bless ya bunches. back at ya.
SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-25-2003 04:30 PM).]

wranx
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5 posted 2003-09-27 10:04 AM


Yes, a good healthy purge. I like the way you used a too-oftrn heard catch phrase to underscore your anger..."darling" Clever and effective.


~wranx

cusick
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6 posted 2003-09-27 11:02 AM


Wonderful Shara, glad to see how assertive you can be. Not been around for a while. Been on holiday. Luv. Maggie

littlewing
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7 posted 2003-09-27 01:34 PM


Shara

I'm not your nothing,
I am something.
You would have known that
Had you taken to the time,
And saw my true intent.

oooh I know . . .
a nice vent indeed
hoping he got the picture

xxoo

SharaRose
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8 posted 2003-09-27 03:53 PM


Thanks to all of you...

Wranx--Thanks again for the comment.
Hi. The "darling" thing is an inside thing only (he) would understand. It was used in a cruel way as a personal dig against me. That's why the reference to "darling" in this way. I know on the outside it sounds very snotty. It's a *VERY* long story.

Cusick--Thank you Maggie. I am glad you liked. I hope your vacation was restful, and exhilirating for you, and any, and all who went with you.

Littlewings--I haven't seen you much lately, but you have certainly been in my thoughts alot. Thanks for reading, and the comment. And yes me, too. I hope so, too.

Bless you all bunches,
SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

QjQ
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9 posted 2003-09-27 08:47 PM


expressing ones interthoughts can be golden,,,

                                                        

SharaRose
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10 posted 2003-09-27 10:46 PM


Hello Q... I don't remember every seeing you here...wow what a surprise! Thanks for reading, and the comment.
Love,
Shara~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

aaron woodside
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11 posted 2003-09-30 12:47 PM


This was truely great.

I particularly enjoyed these lines

"Now you pitch your fit
because my emotions
and my being are all
spent.

I won't come back
bend to your commands
Do what you demand
Your orders came, and went."

You expressed yourself well and I honestly can't find something I would change.

The use of ryhme and short sentence/stanzas really lead to an entertaining read.  Great write.

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

They say the sweet is never as sweet without the sour.  So where's my sweet?

SharaRose
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12 posted 2003-09-30 02:24 PM


Thank you Aaron, I appreciate your critique! I am glad you enjoyed! It was nice of you to point out the strong points so I can learn from that.
Love,
Shara~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

eor
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13 posted 2003-09-30 06:28 PM


Terri, good write, sounds like you are pissed, well i can relate...anyways liked this one...

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

SharaRose
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14 posted 2003-09-30 07:05 PM


Thank you eor, but no, not true, just hurt,  that's all. I'm pretty sure it's been heard of that anger comes out of hurt. It's really not that uncommon.
Love,
Shara ~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-30-2003 07:32 PM).]

gringakiwi
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15 posted 2003-09-30 09:34 PM


good one shara, hope he gets the message! wow, I could feel the intensity of this.

Connie. xx

SharaRose
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16 posted 2003-09-30 10:38 PM


Thank you Connie, but I think it's both of us that needs to get it. This was spoken out of anger...that doesn't show me I have a handle on it when I come back, and read this. It's not funny when *ANYONE* is hurt. I don't see this as something triumphant. What I would see as triumphant is when forgiveness and moving on from it happens. I don't glory in hurting a person. This was out of hurt, and anger from that hurt. If this makes me a goody, goody two-shoes then so be it, it's still how I feel.
Love,
Terri~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-30-2003 10:39 PM).]

shara
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17 posted 2003-10-02 03:43 PM


way to let out some anger shararose, i liked this one...a lot, i'll be reading more from you too be blessed
                       sha-sha
                          

SharaRose
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18 posted 2003-10-02 05:06 PM


Thank you Shara, and I hope to be able to find some of yours to read. I don't know if you rec'd my return email, but I had written I hadn't been able to find any of your writes. I came back and looked again, but haven't yet. I will look now. This is the first place I've came to when I logged on.

Love,
Terri~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

River
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19 posted 2003-10-02 08:22 PM


oooh, good write...sounds like you had some steam to blow off...nice job i think you put whoever this person is in his place.

A river of change is rushing over me, through me. Forfeit to the waters, forget the past, live in the present.

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