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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2003-09-25 04:21 AM




This mid of night
'neath spectral sky she
stands her guard with
watchful eye
in silent poise just
out of reach
protecting from the
shadows' feed this
dank and dreary night
in weep, her darkness
draws me closer still yet
slight of hiss in
muted cry is
warning of
"don't enter here"
admonishment of
"leave me be" in
eremitic circle cast
with quarters called in
circumspect of
circular where
none shall pass...

She guards the night in
watchful keep lest
demons dare
invade my sleep


~Vicky L. Raynes



When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-25-2003 08:12 PM).]

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Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-09-25 08:33 AM


quite amazing, friend..
merlynh
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2 posted 2003-09-25 02:45 PM


It may be true you see those who are there with the good, there it rains on both in a different place so close not understood for not all to see. Well you have someone who looks over you above all.
SharaRose
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3 posted 2003-09-25 04:34 PM


The "leave me be" really stuck out in this write for me. There are times it's better to just part ways, because all it does is just open the wounds over, and, over again. Sometimes it works out that way. It's sad, but true as Metallica says, and they are soooooooooo right!!!!!!!
SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Martie
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4 posted 2003-09-25 04:52 PM


Vicky

At least you're getting some sleep?  Enjoyed this look into your night!  

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2003-09-25 05:14 PM


Wow, Vicky, I don't believe I've read "Dark" by you in the past.

A fantastic write m'dear... enjoyed.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Insomniac Cat
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6 posted 2003-09-25 07:37 PM


You've achieved a perfectly rhythmical piece. Nice job!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-09-25 08:03 PM


smiling wide.

Well, well, miss vicky.

A blessed be from me to thee!

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8 posted 2003-09-25 08:07 PM


Wow, I've read it three times over, and it gets better every time... *hugs*  
Aenimal
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9 posted 2003-09-25 10:23 PM


excellent writing vicky
coyote
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10 posted 2003-09-26 08:21 AM


The flow and style is remarkable.
I enjoyed reading.

Thanks,
coyote


vlraynes
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11 posted 2003-09-26 12:36 PM



Meghan...thanks much, my friend.

Merlynh...yes...I believe that I do.  Thank you so much.

Shara...I'm glad you got something from this.  Thank you.

Martie...unfortunatly, not much sleep on this particular night...
but thank you for the thought, my friend.  Love you, I do...

Maree...I'm glad you enjoyed this one.  Thank you, sweets...

Insomniac Cat...thank you much.  Glad you enjoyed.

Karen...smiling wide right back at you...and a blessed be
from me back to you...smile.  Love you much, lady...

Rhonda...what?...only 3 reads?  LOL.  
Thank you, YOU.  I love ya, ya know...

Raph...thank you much, my friend.

coyote...so glad you enjoyed this.  Thank you.

Thanks so much, everyone.,,
You're all so good to me!
Love and hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-26-2003 12:37 PM).]

wranx
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12 posted 2003-09-27 02:46 AM


"All hope abandon, ye who enter here!"

Nice Vic! (Dark too!)


Ed

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13 posted 2003-09-27 01:28 PM


ahh Vicky  . . . I adore this
reminded me of the moon
keeping watch
silence all around
the slightest nudge
startling
jarring every living nerve
wide- eyed
wonderment
what was that?
ooooh . . . the dark
she does not lie
she knows my fate
my lies
deep down inside

Beautiful writing, as always
nice to see you here

lol
xxoo  

QjQ
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14 posted 2003-09-27 08:49 PM


well penned thoughts,,,

                                                        

dgvarner
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15 posted 2003-10-13 08:20 PM


I gave this one more than one read my friend...

I don't know if I'm warped enough to believe this one is not so "dark", (lol) or if it perhaps is just written well enough to fool me...

enjoyed..

hugs, g

"Now would you mind if I bared my soul / If I came right out and said you're beautiful..."  B. Adams

IcyFlamez89
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16 posted 2003-10-13 08:51 PM


Do you mind if i borrow her? I've a few demons I'd like to keep at bay right now.
Asian Rain
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17 posted 2003-10-14 12:20 PM


I keep coming back to this over ad over. Wonderful writing!
Nan
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18 posted 2003-10-14 09:48 AM


A guardian angel, no doubt... This is a good'n, Vicky...
CrEaTuRe
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19 posted 2003-10-15 12:37 PM


Liked the flow and it's a pleasent read

Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

eor
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20 posted 2003-10-15 04:38 PM


very good write, i did enjoy this very much, really have not seen you too much iin dark but i am glad you are here now!

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

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