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Insomniac Cat
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since 2003-09-23
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0 posted 2003-09-23 12:25 PM


Here's my first posted poem on this forum. Enjoy.

            THE VULTURE
There lies among stern mountains steep
A path that winds its reptile way
Into a valley dim and deep
Where sorrow holds eternal sway

Within this valley drear and dim
There hulks upon a withered tree
Upon a sick and tattered limb
A brooding vulture, hunched and grim

It shuffles slow and silently
Upon that gnarled and tortured limb
It huddles low eternally
Within this valley dark and dim

The people live despondently
Oppressed by dismal lethargy
They trudge this land, their heads hung low
Their thoughts distraught by doleful woe

But lo! the people know its name
And yes! they guess from whence it came
The bird has roosted here for years
Destroying hope—inbreeding fears

This morbid creature shadows gloom
The symbol of eternal sorrow
The shadow of internal doom
The harbinger of no tomorrow

The people can no more abide
This sluggish vulture, dread and grim
Their hollow thoughts turn suicide
Within this valley dead and dim

And still the vulture crouches lone
Upon its bleak and blighted throne
Within this valley dark and dread
With all its people dead

[This message has been edited by Insomniac Cat (09-24-2003 07:56 AM).]

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2003-09-23 02:22 PM


Welcome to the Passions family!

Looks like you know your way around the dark.



I loved your take on the vulture, Peter, and do hope to read more from you soon.

Enjoyed.

(check your e mail for a special greeting from Passions in Poetry!)

Brigid WillowKeeper
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since 2003-08-24
Posts 88
OHIO IN USA
2 posted 2003-09-24 10:13 PM


I totally agree with serinity. You have a talent for dark poetry. Your vocabulary and your use of words in this peice helps make it all the more depressing and profound. It is great to see you here, I am interested to see more of your work.
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