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Youngatheart
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0 posted 2004-01-24 11:14 AM


I do not miss you when you’re gone.
You think I grieve, my heart is torn.

You say I think of nothing else.
But my days are free, there is no stress.

I never question where you are.
I do not care that you are far.

My thoughts are light, my mind is clear.
I do not fret that you aren’t near.

Instead of email I want to read.
My life is full of routine deeds.

It is a relief to be alone.
No urge to call you on the phone.

There is no guilt, no burning thoughts,
Or worries that it’s you I’ve lost.

I know you want me to be strong.
I do not miss you when you’re gone.

[This message has been edited by Youngatheart (01-25-2004 01:09 PM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2004-01-24 11:35 AM


The little "much" in the end ... says it all!

Lovely write!
Margherita

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2 posted 2004-01-24 11:39 AM


Yep, that "much" does say it all. LOL
I was believing you too, until I read that. LOL  
Hugs,  
Ethel

tavern wench
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3 posted 2004-01-24 02:29 PM


nice
McLean
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4 posted 2004-01-24 02:59 PM


Very contradicting, I feel.  

This piece has a light, airy feel to it, and I think it sounds a bit didactic...trying to convince yourself, or someone else?

McLean

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5 posted 2004-01-24 04:24 PM




(giggles in delight) Hehehe...c'mon, it's only been five minutes! (smiles) This is so cute, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

gadfly4you
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6 posted 2004-01-24 05:22 PM


This is wonderful! Poignant....I loved it.....Reminded me of Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art"...
tavern wench
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7 posted 2004-01-28 08:25 AM


I don't think so...
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