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jord4n
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0 posted 2004-01-23 02:13 AM


Youth

youth used me as an excuse
or so she said
youth used me as an excuse
and stole everything from me

youth used me and then gave me an excuse
youth, innocence, is what she claimed
well, I know better than that

you used youth for your excuse
and if that's what youth is
then I wanna hurry and grow up

cause youth has lost it's innocence in myself
and i feel much older than what my bones bare

I lost trust in youth
I lost trust in you

and most importantly
I think I lost trust in life

--

thx

say anything you want.

- Jordan


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1 posted 2004-01-23 07:11 AM


i do understand angst, but "jaded" is usually reserved for those who are older (keeping in mind i assume you are of younger years)....expressing your feelings this way gives you a chance to come back later and reflect....hopefully from a different "point of view"....dont worry, youth may have stolen away with your trust, but, youth truly exists in our minds and our hearts....you can live it at any age in your life...

im glad you are here sharing your thoughts...


Pilgrimage
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2 posted 2004-01-23 09:57 AM


I like the permutations in this one, the progressive changes on 'youth'. Nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

jord4n
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3 posted 2004-01-23 10:32 AM


Thanks for your comments.

- Jordan

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4 posted 2004-01-23 12:48 PM


it happens..yeah
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