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muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

0 posted 2004-01-22 03:50 PM

I knew the dust had'nt settled

thumb up waitin' for a ride
with the heat playin’ tricks
on my eyes

It's been a long time coming.

the horizon's growing longer
like the vacant highway
and it's untravelled miles.

These heels have walked
deserts more vast,
just wish I had my boots on
cause the traffic aint travellin'
my way.

And if I had a map
maybe I'd make a sign
saying "tumbleweeds for sale".

..Everybody's got room for baggage

Gonna be alright though
cause the borderline just lay ahead

justpull-up a dress hem
and let the 18 wheels take me in...

Baby let them rattlesnakes be
up under their skins...
I think its time

I shed me free.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2004-01-22 03:53 PM

now you see.. this made me think of Iambe... so for that I curse you..

but for the poem and the overall way it sings its tale..and for what it leaves on feeling.. kudos....

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-01-22 03:58 PM

sheddings a goods thing, Dawn...
~smiling~
hugsss
M

richard taylor
Member

since 2004-01-13

Posts 136

3 posted 2004-01-22 04:58 PM

Hi Muted,
I do like the way you write and set out your poetry, you are a fine poet.
take care richard.

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

4 posted 2004-01-22 05:21 PM

interesting write...are you an old hippie southern gal?...

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

5 posted 2004-01-23 12:43 PM

~thanks u guys~

oh im "hippie" alright! in a whole 'nother sense!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2004-01-23 01:56 PM

Dawn~
I LIKE this !!!

Wanted you to know that I've shared your stuff with an off-site poet friend ... and she thinks you are a gosh-darned good writer~

Me too !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-01-23 02:12 PM

**BLUSHING**

geez...im flattered you cared to share outside the blue boxes...thank you!
im honoured

i walk in the shadow of greatness my friend
..oh and its sooo nice and cool in the shade!

*hugs* for the *huglet* monster

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

8 posted 2004-01-23 04:18 PM

Oh I like the feel of this one-kind of wild and free. Nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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