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muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

0 posted 2004-01-21 10:45 AM



The horizon's blue
I drink the hue
The sunset takes it's bow.

When stars shine for you
Their glittered view
Hangs heavy on my brow.

If they fall askew
A wish anew
And silence needs somehow.

Beating hearts are true
And echo through
The darkness gone for now.



© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-01-21 10:49 AM


muted
Well done enjoyed the read.

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2 posted 2004-01-21 11:14 AM


a lot of territory covered in just a few words...

nice read..


Terrina
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3 posted 2004-01-21 11:16 AM


When stars shine for you
Their glittered view
Hangs heavy on my brow.

I love the way you use words...
You are so absolute

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4 posted 2004-01-21 11:20 AM


Very nice read...much enjoyed.
Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

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5 posted 2004-01-21 12:24 PM


Seymour Tabin: thank you for visiting my little box, so happy you stopped by!

Cpat: and you are always welcome here, thank you for taking the time

Terrina:You are gonna start me *giggling* again! thank you for having just the right thing to say!

Enchantress: thank you, im glad you enjoyed

choshi
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6 posted 2004-01-21 12:58 PM


Just beautiful, such textures, images, feelings....~C
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7 posted 2004-01-21 01:06 PM


what a great rhyme scheme! and the theme is awesome! very uplifting!
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8 posted 2004-01-21 01:48 PM


I drink the hue


One line so very powerful I feel.

Justbleu
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9 posted 2004-01-21 02:27 PM


This is light and refreshing.....
The blue of passions this reminds me of!!!!
Bridgette

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10 posted 2004-01-21 05:37 PM


This is REALLY good....I can't write like this....only silly stuff...well done sweets
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11 posted 2004-01-21 05:48 PM


nice
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